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A87928762 - Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States

Post 1

Dmitri Gheorgheni

Entry: Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States - A87928762
Author: Dmitri Gheorgheni - U1590784

Another missionary. This one started out in Africa, and headed to the US, where the real heathen were.

I found this amazing story and bring it to you, although I had to wade knee-deep through glurge to do it.

smiley - dragon


A87928762 - Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States

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SashaQ - happysad

Well done for getting through the glurge to tell us in an h2g2 way about a person who deserves to be commemorated in the Guide.

I spotted just a couple of bits that could do with a tweak:

"This happened to Kaboo, because he was a prince, he'd become a 'pawn', and his people couldn't come up with the ransom." - this sentence might need splitting into two.

The paragraph beginning "At this precise moment, Taylor University..." could be tightened up, I think - you mention the bank being about to foreclose twice, and in "partly because they didn't have enough food to feed them with." who are 'they'?

smiley - ok


A87928762 - Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States

Post 3

Dmitri Gheorgheni

Thanks for that good feedback, Sasha. Research took longer than I thought - and reading two books and a pamphlet besides watching one-and-a-half documentaries. By the time I was writing it up, it got late and I got sloppy. Thanks for showing me where I needed to go back and rewrite. smiley - smiley I'll work on links later.

I hope it's better now. I want to do his story justice - a guy with that much joy and determination deserves to be a Hitchhiker. smiley - smiley


A87928762 - Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States

Post 4

SashaQ - happysad

Spot on - thank you smiley - ok

" I want to do his story justice - a guy with that much joy and determination deserves to be a Hitchhiker. smiley - smiley"

Yes indeed smiley - biggrin


A87928762 - Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States

Post 5

Dmitri Gheorgheni

I added a few internal links. smiley - smiley


A87928762 - Prince Kaboo, Missionary: Samuel Morris, from Liberia to the United States

Post 6

Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

An interesting story and very well told. smiley - smiley


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