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A87916846 - Black Horse Westerns and Their Readers

Post 1

BobI

Entry: Black Horse Westerns and Their Readers - A87916846
Author: BobI - U15003083

I enjoyed Peer Review so much I have written another article for you. I hope you like it.


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Post 2

Dmitri Gheorgheni

This is hugely entertaining! smiley - biggrin I happen to know a dedicated reader of Louis L'Amour westerns, so I was interested.

I have one tiny suggestion:

>>He can stalk enemies so silently....<<

May I suggest you take out the word 'so'? I was expecting 'so silently, that....'

I like your suggestion about the telephone book. smiley - smiley Western stories seem to give all their heroes British Isles names, don't they? Strong-sounding ones, though. Can you imagine a Sheriff Entwhistle?


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Post 3

Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

I'm definitely not in the target group, but I really enjoyed reading this!smiley - smiley


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Post 4

bobstafford

Well done you make the books sound interesting, tempted to go out and find one of these to read.
smiley - book


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Post 5

BobI

Thank you Dmitri!

I take your point about the 'so' - that has been taken out now.

That's funny - I was just thinking about using the name Entwhistle. I'm sure Rupert Entwhistle would make an extremely fine sheriff, honest smiley - winkeye


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Post 6

BobI

Thank you Tavaron and bobstafford

Be very careful reading a Black Horse Western - they are highly addictive smiley - winkeye


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Post 7

Dmitri Gheorgheni

Okay, now when you write your story about Sheriff Rupert Entwhistle, we expect to run it in the smiley - thepost. smiley - winkeye


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Post 8

SashaQ - happysad - Editor

smiley - laughsmiley - ok

I really like this too smiley - biggrin

The only thing I wondered was: could you give an example of the vernacular dialogue?

smiley - ok


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Post 9

BobI

Yes. A sample of dialogue has been added. I also added more about Louis L'Amour.


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Post 10

Dmitri Gheorgheni

I like the dialogue, but blush to note that it made perfect sense to me. smiley - blush


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