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A87906757 - The 'Pellucidar' Novels by Edgar Rice Burroughs

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Bluebottle

Entry: The 'Pellucidar' Novels by Edgar Rice Burroughs - A87906757
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

An oft-forgotten series by Edgar Rice Burroughs. I've had help from Gnomon U151503

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A87906757 - The 'Pellucidar' Novels by Edgar Rice Burroughs

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Hi BB, thanks for this. I'm a fan of Edgar Rice Burroughs' writings, particularly the John Carter books. This has passed me by smiley - sadface

A few comments:

>>Of course there had been numerous myths, legends and novels about underground worlds written before Burroughs, of which...<<

I think that should be:

Of course there had been numerous myths, legends and novels about underground worlds written prior to Burroughs', of which...

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>>Written in September to November 1928, fourteen years after the previous book, this immediately followed by a sequel, Tarzan at the Earth's Core. <<

Try:

Written between September and November 1928, 14 years after the previous book, this was immediately followed by a sequel, Tarzan at the Earth's Core.

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smiley - modJason Gridley, Tarzan, David Innes, Abner Perry and von Horst are all mentioned as existing on the first two pages of Burrough's first Venus novel, Pirates of Venus (1932).
Footnote 3: Burrough's wrote using a Corona typewriter and this spelt backwards inspired the island's name.
smiley - modFootnote 5: Apparently named after Burrough's telephone number.
smiley - modFootnote 9: Perry, the eccentric inventor who builds an out-of-control gas balloon, should not be confused with the mad inventor called Perry, a character in Burrough's novel Pirate Blood (written 1932 and first published posthumously in 1970), who a builds an out-of-control gas balloon.
smiley - starBurrough's should be Burroughs' in each case.

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the earth itself = the Earth itself

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Worse still, the mini-sun sitting at the centre of the earth = Earth

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You have "sabretooth" and "sabre-tooth"smiley - biro

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>>First published serialised in Blue Book, a monthly magazine between March and August 1929, for which Burroughs was paid $7,500, this 78,000-word story was later published as a novel in 1930.<<
You need a comma after "magazine"

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I'm interested in the gliding stegosaurus - I must research this.smiley - ok

(Note to self: Remember to copy, preview, then post)

GB
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A87906757 - The 'Pellucidar' Novels by Edgar Rice Burroughs

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

I forgot:

>>who a builds an out-of-control gas balloon.<<

= who builds an out-of-control gas balloon.

But, does he really build an out-of-control gas balloon? Or does he build a gas balloon that goes out of control? smiley - smiley


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Bluebottle

Thanks for the thorough read-through, I've made all the tweaks you've suggested. Sadly the gliding stegosaurus only makes a brief appearance in the series, but it is just such a fascinatingly bizarre yet imaginative idea I had to include it.smiley - ok

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Bluebottle

Oh, apparently the idea had been proposed by an amateur palaeontologist: http://www.smithsonianmag.com/science-nature/the-fantastic-gliding-stegosaurus-107838636/

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - yikes

Imagine the size of the guano... smiley - run


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Bluebottle

Stegosaurus flying high
Dropped a coprolite from the sky…

I have been considering writing a couple more entries about Burroughs' books, but if I did they would probably not be in so much detail. (Covering his 'Venus' and Historical novels).

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SashaQ - happysad - Editor

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"A practical way to avoid this would be to wear velcro-soled shoes, but the downside is that you would have to cover the entire inner surface of Pellucidar with some sort of looped carpet."

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Fascinating that Edgar Rice Burroughs described how he learned the stories smiley - bigeyes

"a vast stampede caused by a pack of hundreds of sabretooth tigers hunting" - what animal is stampeding?

"Is the painfully stereotypical portrayal of Robert Jones the airship's cook forgivable?" - how does one stereotype a cook?

Pantaletta sounded intriguing, but is quite the tale of antifeminism, I see...

Footnote 11 is just right - I wondered exactly that about O-aa smiley - laugh

"meeting the Old Man whose name is not Dolly Dorcas, a man from the outer world whose whaling vessel, the Dolly Dorcas, fell into Pellucidar through the polar opening many years earlier." - why do you repeat Dolly Dorcas?

You mention the novel written in 1944 and published in 1963 twice - could that be condensed into one mention?

I haven't finished reading yet, but made it up to the Pellucidar's People section... smiley - puff


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Bluebottle

Edgar Rice Burroughs would indeed describe how he learned the stories, but the introductions were often as imaginative as the actual stories. For example, Burroughs was born in Chicago in 1875 but he tells us he was told the story 'A Princess of Mars' on his Virginia plantation before the American Civil War (1861-5).

What animal is stampeding? Well, pretty much every conceivable animal that isn't a sabretooth tiger...

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SashaQ - happysad - Editor

I find the list of different species too repetitive, as we have already met the important ones in the text... The list of main characters is repetitive, too, as you've already described them in the story summary... I see this Entry is more than 5,000 words long, so you don't need to tell us things twice if you can possibly help it - have pity on the reader please A87900302smiley - grovel

I didn't understand the paragraph about the damsels in distress very well - they are all damsels in distress, but most of them are not smiley - huh

I don't understand the footnote on other works written at about the same time, either - the book was edited to add 'whitewashing', or to remove some overt racism? should the footnote be somewhere else?

Does the mention of big game follow on from the disturbing sentence about poison gas, or would that sit better higher up?

Very interesting about the Tarzan/Pellucidar crossovers smiley - ok


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Bluebottle

Edited.

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