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A87888217 - Domfront En Poire Basse Normandy France

Post 21

bobstafford

Hello Tav is that more like what you wanted.

I will add links to the obscure historical names if you agree thanks again for your editing smiley - cheers


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Post 22

Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

smiley - cheers Thanks bob, that's a very good improvement. smiley - smiley


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Post 23

bobstafford

Any more comments please
smiley - biggrin


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Post 24

bobstafford

Some links added


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Post 25

bobstafford

Links added comments welcomesmiley - smiley


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Post 26

Bluebottle

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Entry: Domfront En Poire Basse Normandy France - A87888217
Author: bobstafford - U3151547

I enjoy reading the entry, but think the opening paragraph could be tightened slightly, especially as the opening is about the town and the next section is about the castle. Perhaps you could mention how far the castle is from the town centre so the reader is following directions leading from one to the other?

Also, did you want to mention that Claude Du Valle was reportedly a flageolet player?

<BB<


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Post 27

bobstafford

Thanks for the comments <BB< Amendments made any comments smiley - smiley


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Post 28

bobstafford

Hello >BB> looking forward to your opinion of the amendments you suggested assuming the amendments are as requested, if and when this goes to the editors where do we send photos now.

smiley - cheers


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Post 29

bobstafford

Any more comments?smiley - smiley


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