h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

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http://www.h2g2.com/A160930 called Groundhog Day,
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Anonymouse (40077)

Hi Mousey!
I liked the idea, and I liked the bulleted definitions. No grammar or spelling errors detected.
One little suggestion, could you give some examples somewhere so it would be a little more obvious what you were getting on about? I think that might help strengthen the entry!

Overall, 7.5 on the famous 10-point scale!

I have found, by painful rejection experience, the h2g2 editors prefer an entry to have all three of (1) an introduction, (2) a description and (3) pertinant explanation points.

This entry is not written in that style. Mr Mouse I am sure you can rectify this.

Maybe explain why movies taken from books don't necessarily follow the book's story line and other examples of "poetic licence" in practice.

5/10 but I know it will improve after experiencing the gruelling Fun Run critique.

LOL - I like it - short & to the point.
Maybe an example or two fleshing out the points would improve it - but then what do I know, the only things Ive had accepted are co-operative efforts.

;^)#

Erm.. I -was- kinda hoping for some content suggestions on this one.

Ginger offered up some in the Errr! thread below, and thinks I should call it "Artistic License" instead...

I was always under the impression that 'poetic license' was a general, rather non-poetic term covering the whole genre.... I think 'artistic license' is a more modern, politically correct term. (And as I've said, I'm more of a PI mousie. )

Poetic licence - justifiable departure from conventional rules of form, fact, logic etc... as in poetry.

Artistic licence - changes made to an original work by a third party, mainly for commercial reasons

Boose artist - a person devoted to or proficient at drinking

Ah, thank you, Looney... Then it is indeed poetic license I am on about.

>rhythmic flow and/or rhyme of poetic verse.
I think the difference between these two is so
slight that it is hardly worth mentioning...
how about changing it to, simply, "rythmic flow
[or rythmical even...]"

>Changing the nature of the characters in a non-fiction or based-on-fact tale.
I had to read this several times over to
understand it... I think that you should
expound this more clearly- such as by adding
examples of such use of "poetic license"

>good story
Consult a thesaurus for both of these words...
they seem out of place, when compared with the
language used in the rest of the piece

Yep it sounded good to me!
A little bit short, but then again, I can't think of anything to add!

There are other situations that don't seem to be listed that force writers to turn to poetic licence e.g. translation from one language into another where a certain phrase does not directly translate.
Also when reconstructing someone's life many biographers/historians 'fill in the blanks' between known events in a character's life via the use of poetic licence and yet are not truly guilty of dishonesty - it's all about trying to convey a 'sense' of a personality/era by extrapolating known facts. Overall though, a fair assessment of what the term means.

BTW if you think this critique is a bit dry then feel very happy that I didn't use the phrase 'Dynamic Equivalence'.

Oh damn, I just did

Rythmic flow and rhyme are two very distinctly different concepts.

I'm seeing a lot of suggestions for examples. Specific examples could get a bit ugly, since not all readers will be familiar with different works, but I'll see about adding some generic examples.

"Good story" is too simple, eh? Maybe I need another lesson in K.I.S.S. ?

Thanks WF! This is the kind of stuff I'm looking for!

When I had the idea to write the article, I had this long list of things I wanted to include. Unfortunately I didn't have my desktop with me, and that particular stretch of highway didn't lend itself well to using pen and paper. (I'm probably the last known member of the human species without a laptop. Donations welcome! ) Unfortunately, at about the time I sat back in my comfy chair (well, it used to be comfy) the screen in my brain went blank and the recovery disk was corrupt.

It will get longer.

>rhythmic flow and/or rhyme of poetic verse

Rhyme- correspondence in terminal sounds

Rythmic Flow- regular rise and fall in the flow of sound in speech

Hmm...

Correspondence- agreement between particular things; in literature, defined as similarities between sentences, as by noun or syllable agreement

I'm sorry; they seem extremely similar to me... I would not make the distinction.

Ooooh, vegidude was busy between runs!

Nice article, and an excellent idea, but it definitely leaves the reader wanting more. Perhaps some amplification of each bullet, or some examples would help give it life.

Once again, I imagine you'll split the audience with the bulleted layout and brevity of the piece. And once again I am not a fan of bullets, but I'll shuit up about that as I went on about it last time!!

As for the content - it could do with a little more. There's no doubt that there is the start of a good article here, but that's what it seems like to me: just a beginning. Also, the last bullet point: most? Almost ...

near 7.

DT: You're absolutely right, it -is- only the beginning, which is why I entered this piece. There is a wealth of information in these here researchers' minds, and I was hoping to harvest me some. Ideas and suggestions VERY welcome.


Oh, and you'll be happy to know that in this case, I'd be happy to replace the bulletted format, when I can get a bit more content.

Sounds good.

Does anything not sound good to you? I've seen that same phrase pop up with your name attached several times

Spork, have you had a rough day? You're not related to Davros are you?