h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

sorry for replying so late

I think you are right about the onions and will think about the description. Like you I searched for an Entry with anything of the kind but I also didn't find anything.

ok.. what about this for 'onion shapes':

These domes have a wide, round base and a relatively short pointed top. While they can be found in many countries Russian versions are especially intriguing due to their many colors or even tiles layed in patterns.

A87927600 Early Christian and Byzantine Architecture - from catacombs to churches
I've added this sentence after 'onion shapes'. Would you like to have a thorough read-through of the whole entry and let me know what you think?

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Introduction:
'The vaulted catacombs were connected with narrow tunnels and steep staircases and often had multiple levels.'
Would 'connected BY' be more correct here? I don't know.

Byzantium, 2nd paragraph:
'Other parts of the churches were topped by barrel vaults and rounded arches are prevailing.'
This sounds kind of strange, doesn't it? Replace 'and' with a comma or semicolon? Would that work? Not sure what is correct here in English.

'The churches were built from either natural stone or bricks, sometimes both are combined in horizontal layers.'
are > were?

Oh and the Entry we talked about linking to should have a proper picture now A1018586

I can't find anything else, thanks a lot for subbing

Thanks for your comments, I've made some changes so if you could have a read-through and let me know whether it meets your approval.

With that strange sentence, one problem was the change in tense from 'were' to 'are' and it also seemed to me like it was the start of a list listing two common features. I've joined that sentence to the following one so it now lists three common features, but can change it if you wish.

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If you think it works the way it is that's fine for me.

Can you have a thorough read-through and let me know if it meets your approval or whether there are any more changes you would like to make?

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Thanks, looks good, I didn't find anything else.

Okay, I pressed the button!

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Thanks a lot for subbing!

A87935601 Architecture of the Middle Ages - darkness and light
I'll be subbing the above, so please subscribe. Just when you'd thought you'd got rid of me.

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Hi again BB! You're doing a great job I think!

May I ask a couple of questions:
rhytmically – should this be rhythmically?
'with the council house on top of a market' – in the UK a 'council house' is a house owned by the council, rather than a private landlord, and rented to low-income families. Is there another phrase we could use?
'Sometimes the walls even needed reinforcements on the outside.' – do you mean buttresses?

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yes, rhythmically

sorry, wrong word I guess, I mean town hall

yes, buttresses, I just wasn't sure the word was generally known to people who don't have a lot to do with architecture or history

Thanks, I've made those changes now.

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Would you like to have a thorough read-through and let me know if there's anything you'd like to change, or whether it meets your approval to go on to the next stage?

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Looks good to me, thank you!

Button pressed!

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Thank you!