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Entry: Pune 2 - A3628893
Author: taandav - U1299600

once again i write this an unearthly hour . i do believe i might have done a better job this time though .

Hello taandav!

Seems very interesting - I would title the entry "Colleges and Schools in Pune, India" - as the header (Pune 2) is somewhat vague. I thought it was a rewrite when I first saw the header.

It's just a matter of style, but if you have nothing to write on a particular college, I would either a) not include it at all, b) find out more about it, or c) say something like "other colleges include Lalit Natya Akademi, Bhandarkar Institute of Oriental Research,..." etc." The focus in your entry should be to provide information in an interesting way, such as what you have done for example regarding the BJMC.

My ignorance, but who or what is wrangler paranjpe?

You also need to pay some attention to capitalisations, eg. i2it should be I2IT, india, St annes (St Anne's) etc.

There are also some words abbreviated such as govt (government), rep (representative).

Finally, you will need to remove all personal expressions, such as "I shall be slightly more particular in the way i write entries in deference to the wishes expressed by my peers here .
Today i will write about the various educational possibilities in pune .
"

or

Pune as I said (you don't need the "as I said")

As a rule people don't use "I","me","we","my" etc. It should be an objective account, and not personal.The reason for this is because your entry may be added to or modified by another researcher in the future.


Hope this helps!

Woodpigeon

Hi Taandav,

How is it going with this entry?

Author appears to have gone AWOL

Move back to entry?

Blimey Mort, two months to the day There's efficiency for you

Seconded

Sorry Kat

Shall I add this to my list then?

Yup.