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Alternative Writing Workshop: A75245934 - Broken Strings of Sitar
kk Started conversation Oct 7, 2010
Entry: Broken Strings of Sitar - A75245934
Author: kk - U822728
Dear Friends,
It's been a while since I posted something here...I hope you remember me at least.
Would you have time to read my newest piece and be generous with your constructive comments. English being my second language, I am always concerned about the grammar and the style of narration.
Lots of thanks,
kk
A75245934 - Broken Strings of Sitar
Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Oct 7, 2010
This is just beautiful. 
What a gorgeous slice of life. And a glimpse into a world in which drivers let people stop by riverbanks...
I loved it, and I don't have much to add. Thank you for sharing this.
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kk Posted Oct 8, 2010
Thank you so much for your praise...and thank you for reading!
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minorvogonpoet Posted Oct 8, 2010
Yes, this is lovely. Very evocative of a place and way of life. 
But I did find it difficult in places to work out who was speaking and what their relationships were.
A few more hints, or a few more physical descriptions of people might help. But this is subtle, impressionistic and it wouldn't do to spoil it with long explanations.
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kk Posted Oct 10, 2010
Thank you! Points taken about a few more hints. Thank you again! -kk
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