h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Airedale Terriers - A1131968
Author: Lampost_of_the_Babblefishes - U236290

Airedales Terriers, there wasn't an entry for them yet, so I wrote one. Tell me how it is.

It's a good start, but a bit brief! I'm all for brevity, but I think you really need to flesh it out from a series of bullet points into actual paragraphs.

What d'you think?

I do believe your most likely right, it should be less... to the point. Well, I don't mean to the point, I was just making a stupid pun on bulletpoints, I actually mean I should expand on the information and change it to more paragraphish form. Thanks very much for your help.

Might be worth a footnote that in the UK badgers are protected and should not be hunted - wouldn't care to say what the legal situation with regard to hunting foxes with dogs right now.

What about care of the breed ? Do they require grooming ? I'm assuming they're hardy and not susceptable to any particular diseases or afflictions. Size of litter ?

This would add a bit more meat to the bones ?

Thanks very much.

The header at the top should be removed - the title acts as the first header.

A little more history is availible at:

http://www.barkbytes.com/history/airdal.htm

But a better history is here:

http://web.nigma.se/atg/folder/historyeng.html

There is some information in those works that might help add a little depth. These were the first few sites that popped up on google, if you wanted to dig deeper, I'm sure you can find more.

You're definately on the right track.

Friar

The links look good and a bit more information would help flesh this entry out.

Thanks for all the help, I will edit it accordingly.

How's it going?

Couple of spelling/style points:

I think footnote 1 would be better after the word 'badgers', rather than at the end of the sentence.

"There fur in very wiry and it is generally kept short."

Should be "Their fur".

"England during the 1860's"

The ' isn't needed in the date -1860s instead.

Aside of that, I like it. Brief, but containing all essential info

I've edited a bit, but I'm not quite sure how long I want the entry.. Nor what details/information to include or omit..
But, I'm working on it!

Just passing through, I hope..?
My entry wasn't bad enough to deserve ' away mode',was it?
Meep!

Just passing thru

Whew! Carry on then!

Looking good , apart from a few typos:

Airedale's are the -> Airedales are the... (less apostrophe)
1900's -> 1900s (same as with 1860s)

Well, if you want to add a bit more flesh to it then how about breeding - what is the gestation time, how many dogs per litter etc ?



Bossel

Hi,

Nice little entry.

I didn't view the source, but there's something wrong with each FOOTNOTE. There's a period between the word the footnote is on and the super.

Otherwise, agree with what Bossel said.

Awu

Are you still working on this? It's nearly there, I think - are you able to sort out the problem Awu mentioned? Also, I'd suggest removing the first header, as that's something the Sub-Editors are advised to do as a matter of course (reason being that it looks funny in some skins) and I reckon the entry reads just as well without it.