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Subbing 'Return of the Psammead'
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Started conversation Oct 19, 2017
Hiya BB, me again!
I am working on A87897019 <--- I wish you would click this link
1st query:
>>However, over the course of the series it is revealed that she had never had a childhood of her own, being a lonely only child raised by a harsh nanny named Norah.<<
it's "she had never had a childhood of her own" that I have an issue with there, she did have a childhood, but it was lonely. Would you like to rephrase it, or shall I, and then you can approve it or not.
GB
Subbing 'Return of the Psammead'
Bluebottle Posted Oct 19, 2017
Ah, that's a wish that's easily granted, but you won't get another 'til tomorrow.
You're right, she had been a child, so we should rephrase it to:
'she had never been allowed or able to play or act as a child when young'
<BB<
Subbing 'Return of the Psammead'
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Oct 21, 2017
Your suggestion:
However, over the course of the series it is revealed that she had never been allowed or able to play or act as a child when young, being a lonely only child raised by a harsh nanny named Norah.
That's still a bit clunky, how about:
However, over the course of the series it is revealed that her own childhood was unhappy, being a lonely, only child raised by a harsh nanny named Norah.
Subbing 'Return of the Psammead'
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Oct 24, 2017
>>She refuses to let the children call her by her Christian name as that is too familiar, and insists she calls them the more formal Aunt Marchmont.<<
shouldn't that be:
She refuses to let the children call her by her Christian name as that is too familiar, and insists they call her the more formal Aunt Marchmont.
Subbing 'Return of the Psammead'
Bluebottle Posted Oct 25, 2017
Yes, you're right – that's exactly what I meant, sorry.
I have read through this entry a few times and can't believe I didn't spot that.
<BB<
Subbing 'Return of the Psammead'
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Oct 31, 2017
It never hurts to have a second pair of eyes look over your work
All subbed and ready for final approval
GB
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