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Bluebottle Started conversation Feb 16, 2016
Entry: The Ultimate Pixar Animated Film Guide: 1995-1999 - A87867698
Author: Bluebottle - U43530
Continuing my mission to watch every animated film devoid of minions so you don't have to.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted Feb 16, 2016
Good stuff!
Some nitpicks:
decided to sell of Lucasfilm's digital computer division -- sell off
Initial discussions with Steve Jobs at Apple fell through, yet when Steve Jobs left Apple -->
Initial discussions with Steve Jobs at Apple fell through, yet when Jobs left Apple
Despite this success, the studio was still relying on making adverts in order to stay afloat, had hopes to attract -->
Despite this success, the studio was still relying on making adverts in order to stay afloat, but hoped to attract
they began first co-production -->
they began their first co-production
it was anticipated to be successful --> it was expected to be successful
Similarly the number 'A113' also occurs in every Pixar film -->
Similarly the code 'A113' occurs in every Pixar film
who quickly becomes Andy's favourite --> who quickly becomes his favourite
Woody feels replaced and intense jealousy --> Woody feels replaced and intensely jealous
calender --> calendar
A87867698 - The Ultimate Pixar Animated Film Guide: 1995-1999
Bluebottle Posted Feb 16, 2016
Wow! That was a fast review – someone read something I bunged in Peer Review within 30 minutes? I was expecting a wait of at least six months. Nitpicks tweaked
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SashaQ - happysad Posted Apr 13, 2016
I enjoyed this indeed.
I like the introductory paragraph, but I think the main body of the Entry needs more information about what it means - George Lucas is the successful director, and the spectacular failure is Howard the Duck?
Do you say what year Pixar was born?
A87867698 - The Ultimate Pixar Animated Film Guide: 1995-1999
SashaQ - happysad Posted Dec 19, 2016
A thorough readthrough for this Entry too, as the series will be a worthy addition to the Edited Guide
"In 1973 he made a 3D digital animation of his left hand, which later appeared in the film Futureworld (1976), and soon after became director of the Computer Graphics Lab at the New York Institute of Technology."
Nitpick - split this into two sentences just to clarify that his left hand wasn't the director
Footnote 2, I think you could emphasise that Lasseter *returned* to Disney in 2006.
You could perhaps emphasise that the lamp is an anglepoise lamp (I find it is impressively expressive )
"Point Richmond, California's Hidden City Café " - Should this be "The Hidden City Cafe in Point Richmond, California"?
Perhaps mention in the Bug's Life section that the Pizza Planet Van is from Toy Story
"•Hopper, the grasshopper's ruler " - Hopper, ruler of the grasshopper colony?
"•Wheezy, a penguin (Roe Ranft)•Wheezy, a penguin (Roe Ranft)" - Should that be Joe Ranft?
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