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Alternative Writing Workshop: A75157653 - Hip Hop Rivalry

Post 1

jzzyprin93

Entry: Hip Hop Rivalry - A75157653
Author: jzzyprin93 - U14600827

Please read and Comment Thanks!smiley - smiley


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

This is interesting, and I'll bet lots of hootooers don't know any of this.

I would change the first sentence's assertion, maybe, to talk about the popularity of hip-hop, rather than challenging the reader to accept that it is 'one of the best' genres. (And I'm not just saying that because I don't listen to hip-hop. I'm a horrible old folkie, but that has nothing to do with it.)

Maybe you could tell us more about what kinds of things hip-hop artists feud about. Only personal rivalries, or ideas, business affairs, whatever?

Also, a question of personal interest: What does Ice-T say about all of this? I really respect him as an actor, and he seems to have a ton to say about things. Is there a really big divide between rap and hip-hop?


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Post 3

jzzyprin93

No there isn't a big divide between real rap or hip hop,but between fake hip hop and rap, yes there is a big divide.


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Post 4

Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

Heh-heh, and what makes hip-hop fake? Bad rhymes? Bad ideas?


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Post 5

jzzyprin93

smiley - laughWhat makes hip hop fake is the people who are spitting the rhymes. They have to be saying something, anything.


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

Ah. You need to talk to Willem. smiley - biggrin He and I are in an ongoing dicussion about songs and song lyrics. I agree - say something besides 'baby, baby'.

In the meantime, I'm going to suggest that what this essay needs is more about hip-hop: What it does, who these people are, where they live, what it feels like...you almost have a rhythm going in this, as it is, make it more like that.


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Post 7

jzzyprin93

I'm going to edit it to add more hip-hop rivalries and the basis behind most beefs.


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

smiley - ok And explain 'beef' if it's a special term. (Remember: This is being read by Brits, Germans, and other non-US-type people. smiley - winkeye)


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Post 9

jzzyprin93

Disagreements=beefs


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

smiley - rofl I know...but put it in the story. smiley - winkeye Just in case.


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Post 11

jzzyprin93

smiley - rofl Ok I'm going to edit it by 2morrow. I'm trying to finish with The Road to New Zealand and I'm having writers block and I need help. smiley - erm


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Post 12

Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

smiley - ok


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Post 13

minorvogonpoet

This is interesting. smiley - smiley

However, I agree with Dmitri that it would be better if you told your readers more about hip-hop and the artists involved in it.

I would suggest you split this piece into shorter paragraphs.


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Post 14

Bluebottle

I think this entry had promise and could be FM material.

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Post 15

SashaQ - happysad

I agree - I learned something from this as I know of Tupac but didn't know the circumstances of his death...


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