h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A589052

This is an article about house dances. To find out what they are, read the article. I know its in the first person, but i can only write from my perspective, see? This article was a labour of love. Dont read the first few paragraphs and forget about it.

OK, so I'll be nice now - here's the link you want

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A598089

*now* I'll go off and read it.

Hi, I never knew they did such things at public schools.

I like the gist of this its amusing and informative.

There's quite a few typos though, any chance of running it through a spell checker?
Also, can you rewrite it in the third person - 1st person articles will onlt be excepted under special circumstances such as 'My experience of cancer' or 'I had a hyserectomy' for example.
I don't really think this article falls into the category of a 1st person article

What's a pashmina?

I dunno - Dutch courage has worked for me a few time? I take your point about it though.

I must say it sounds pretty darn similar to the old school discos I used to go to (except for the bar).

Anyway, I must say I like the gist but I'm not sure if the character of it will be the same if its rewritten in the third person.

Maybe either retitle it something like 'My Experience of House Dances' or rewrite it in third person.
I dunno What do others think?

Orcus

Hey Hi, so now it's in the correct form...

I didn't want to get involved, as mentioned, but somehow now I'm caught in it (You see, I'm something people usually describe as a science-geek, but I'll go have a look anyway...) Sometimes it's good to see comments from the 'other side'.

*later*

*phew... read it*

My view on parties: It's too loud to talk, but you're not there to talk. Scoring? Forgettit! Too ugly, and can't dance... And who scores anyway? What is the sense behind a party? My conclusion: There is none. Perhaps this is one of the reasons that moved me to the 'science side of the force'... I always wondered how come that all my friends *enjoy* going to dance parties... After the party they have flirted a lot, drunk a lot (possibly until they vomit), and are exhausted... BUT: Did they achieve anything? 99% No. They did not get to know anyone better. They did not go to bed with anyone. In the end they just went to a loud place, intoxicated themselves with alcohol (I usually was the first one to get stiff-drunk - because of the senseless small-talk, and because all the model-girls chose to ignore me...), smoked a lot of nicotine (ever had a cigarette hang-over? - it's the worst kinda sh*t that could happen to you) - or something else - then went home singing aloud in the street - Feeling like it's been the best damn party ever. But what was it? A lot of nothing.

*Pheeeew*

Anyway... This entry portrays a *quite personal* view on a certain kind of party. To me it did not add any new information - sorry. And I'm afraid it can get *my* recommendation - But hey ho - I'm probably just not someone whom this entry was written for - I kinda stumbled in here by accident.

It was fun reading through it, I must admit.

Good luck,

HELL

I'm not sure i want to rewrite it. it is probably too personal, but lets see what anyone else has to say about it. cheers for taking a look at it. i only really posted it cos i wanted to see what people thought of it.

typos are a fact of my rather gibbering style of typing, but illget rid of them.

pashminas are stupid bits of fabric. indescribably so.

Hi, Nice Entry.

A typo that the spellchecker surely missed is "my" in the first paragraph. Probably should be "may".

Also, I think in order to be included it will have to be rewritten to 3rd person. It might take a little ingenuity to keep the zast(is this a word in english?) of it without the use of 1st person, but if you can pull it off, it'll be so much better then the title change Orcus suggested as an alternative.


Dancer (Who is not used to be the one to bring bad news)

I think zest is the word you're looking for Dancer

far too lazy to change anything

thanks for the compliment tho.

the next article im writing is in thge 3rd person, so thatll be ok

So Do you want someone else to be allowed to rewrite the entry (using the flee market) or do you want the PR thread hung off the entry and give up sending this one to the guide?

It sure can't stay here if you mean to leave the entry as is.


Dancer

we should probably take it down in that case. i dont want someone who hasnt experienced one to write about it.

What if someone that has experianced one will take it off the flee market?

It is OK to feel you want this to remain as is, if so, the thread will be moved to the entry.


Dancer

Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'Peer Review' to 'House Dances'.

Hi folks,

This thread has been removed from Peer Review at the author's request.

There you go

Hpe to see other Entries from you soon enough.


Dancer