h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A538562

I dig this because i wrote it, and think that it should have it's own place in the edited guide.

I'd like to try one but I fear it might be a bit too sweet for my taste. I don't like the idea of using limeade concentrate.

Do you suppose you could add the traditional recipe as well, or the best one you know of? You know - have both the sweet and the sour versions.

Could you explain what "triple sec" and "BB shot" is?

You need to correct a few spelling errors.

Other than that, it looks good enough to drink

Fatty, a splendid start but, alas, you have a few structure problems. The areas about where it's best to partake of the drink and the recipie itself should be separated by headings. The yarn should also be written in the third person.

A yarn I wrote about bourbon, that has been accepted into the Edited Guide, may give you a few ideas on how to restructure your story. It lives at http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A526196

Hope that helps
Loony

Fatty, if you are struggling to work out how a yarn about bourbon could have any relevance to your one about margaritas may I point out mine features a splendid recipe for a Mint Julup

thak you for the input. please note changes in descriptions (more), and removal of first person writing (except in closing). also, i think that your mint julep sounds wonderful, i'll be sipping one tommorow after a few hours work in the garden.
cheers
fatty

Awesome.

You may want to format it now.

Start each paragraph with a and end them with a
For the suheadings use and

SHINY AND NEW:
now formatted in guideML
slight changes to follow

Splendid, even mouth watering

Editorial Note: This thread has been moved out of the Peer Review forum because this entry has now been recommended for the Edited Guide.

If they have not been along already, the Scout who recommended your entry will post here soon, to let you know what happens next. Meanwhile you can find out what will happen to your entry here: http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/SubEditors-Process

Congratulations!

Fatty, your splendid yarn will now be sent to the sub editors for a bit of final polishing. Eventually it will appear on the h2g2 front page. When that happens you will be sent an email informing you of the happy event.

Congratulations

Loony

i'm so stoked!
thanks for all the help everyone, i couldn't have made it without you. i hope to be submitting more in the future, and we'll talk more then.
cheers
fatty