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Alternative Writing Workshop: A53733279 - Childhood Memories

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aka Bel - A87832164

Entry: Childhood Memories - A53733279
Author: B'Elana [©] ACE- Minister of Abbr. - EotM (April) and UG Gem (May) - AND I am Six! - U230913

I blame dmitri for this one. He said something which triggered this memory.

Let me know what you think.


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Keith Miller yes that Keith Miller

I'd imagine that it would be the cause of your concerns about toilet smells to this day.

I'll be back to this but first impression on the style is that there are too many short sentences at the begging of this little narrative of childhood memories.

BBL.


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minorvogonpoet

This effectively conveys the disgust and the smells. It reminds me of French campsites in the 60s! smiley - yuk

Keith could be right in saying that there are too many short sentences at the beginning. Perhaps try varying them a bit.


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Pinniped


Love it for its confessional aspect, but Keith's right. In fact this is more Journal style than AWW style. It's a neat subject for creative writing though, and well worth development. Nice combination of repression and revulsion. Tricky themes to hold on to when writing, I find, because you tend to write yourself out of the mindset.

If you want to face your terrors full on, and to pick up some useful source material too, the Guide is predictably thorough on the subject. Try these Edited specimens (at least one of which Keith will probably appreciate too): A248726, A873876

Then, if you really want the full course of treatment, find yourself a copy of a little book called 'The Specialist' by Charles Sale. (It's sometimes noted that very few of mankind's great philosophical works were originally written in the English language. Point conceded, but maybe this is one of the fewsmiley - winkeye)


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aka Bel - A87832164

Ooh, thank you all for your feedback! This is really helpful.
I chose the short sentence style because I associate short sentences with speed, and I thought I could stress the urge to get done with it all by using these short sentences. However, if it doesn't work, I'll think of something.

MVP, I visited a French Camping site in the 1990s, and although the facilities were a far cry from what I described here, I remembered them while writing this. The concept is just too similar.

Thanks for the links, Pin. I read the dunnies entry, but not yet the other one. I'll look out for that book. smiley - ok


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aka Bel - A87832164

I have rewritten it. I hope it is better without losing its impact.
I've added a bit to the ending (thanks, Jordan, for telling me smiley - winkeye).


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Freshly Vaccinated

smiley - rofl This is great.

I would apologise for having being the unwitting cause of this horrible trip down memory lane to the outhouse, but I refuse to, because I'm so pleased you took it up.

Oh - my relatives used old thread spools for doorknobs.smiley - laugh


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Post 8

Tibley Bobley

Thanks for that Bel. It's far too well expressed. I was right there, gagging with you. It almost feels like one of my own memories nowsmiley - yuk

I don't know how common this is. For ages I thought it was just me - but then I found my aunt had the same thing. We both had/have lavatory nightmares - each nightmare different, but all about filthy loos - often with doors that won't close properly or even glass doors/walls. My aunt's dead now so, unless it's a common thing that people don't talk about, it might just be me again... So thanks for thatsmiley - ill

smiley - smiley


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aka Bel - A87832164

No need to apologise, dmitri. smiley - biggrin

Just be careful what you tell me next. smiley - winkeye

If I'm honest, I don't recall that specific doorknob (but I am sure about the hook, isn't that weird?), but it was an image which popped up from somewhere, so I used it.


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aka Bel - A87832164

Thank you, Tibley. I have or had nightmares about loos, usually of the sort you find in schools. I always wondered whether something once happened there which causes these nightmares. But maybe it goes much deeper, and back to this original scene which I had totally forgotten until today?


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Post 11

Tibley Bobley

After talking about it for years with my aunt, I don't think it's entirely to do with the filthy loos. With both of us these nightmares always popped up when we were feeling insecure about something. It's true that we both had a horror of filthy loos, but it just seemed to be the shorthand our sleeping mind used to express that sort of fear. But what do I know? I'm no kind of psychologist. It might just be coincidence that it took the both of us that way. It's interesting that you've had them too - but you put it down to some buried trauma from early childhood. Makes you thinksmiley - smiley


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aka Bel - A87832164

Oh, but you are probably closer with the insecurity factor. There are always other people involved in my nightmares, and there is a definite lack of 'privacy' - either the walls are low (like in kindergarden loos), or there are two in the same room, or.... the scenario varies, but the feeling is always the same. So yes, it can well be about insecurity. And I've never before mentioned these nightmares to anybody.


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Post 13

Tibley Bobley

I think we're on to something here Belsmiley - wow I'm so pleased to know it's not just me again. I wonder how common these nightmares are. Do men have them too? It could be everybody - and no-one's ever mentioned itsmiley - yikes


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Post 14

Dmitri Gheorgheni - Freshly Vaccinated

I know of at least 2 other hootooers who have discussed toilet dreams. And I have them, too.smiley - laugh


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Post 15

Tibley Bobley

Whey heysmiley - biggrin

It's a happeningsmiley - wow


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aka Bel - A87832164

That's absolutely fascinating. I'm so pleased I wrote this little story, this discussion is cathartic. (pun intended) smiley - biggrin


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Post 17

Pinniped


Here you go. The Specialist!
http://journeytoforever.org/farm_library/specialist.html


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Post 18

Tibley Bobley

You could research it (say, over at Ask) and write an entry. Since we've never heard anything about the phenomenon before, it might turn out to be completely originalsmiley - bigeyes


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aka Bel - A87832164

Thank you for the link, Pin. smiley - smiley

Why don't you do that yourself, Tibley? Or maybe we can get dmitri to do it. smiley - evilgrin


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Post 20

Tibley Bobley

I think it should be one of you scholarly typessmiley - whistle


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