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A87965860 - 'Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back' - the Film

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Bluebottle

Entry: 'Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back' - the Film - A87965860
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

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A87965860 - 'Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back' - the Film

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Gnomon - time to move on

Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back

This bromantic duo comprise of -->
This bromantic duo consist of

100 minute-long film --> 100-minute-long film

21st century --> 21st Century

a Greatest Hits approach compilation -->
a Greatest Hits compilation

to stop them hanging outside the Quick Stop -->
to stop them hanging around outside the Quick Stop

as well as illegally download and share -->
as well as to illegally download and share

In your Dramatis Personæ table, there's a rogue comma at the end of Character

Once again you have both Randal and Randall.

whose last page had read 'The End' -->
whose last page reads 'The End'

Smith notes his battles with the MPAA in order to get the rating approved that, while the film contains almost-constant sexual references, the MPAA was far more censoriously censuring of homosexual sex references than the comparative, similar heterosexual sex references
-- there's something wrong with the structure of this. You're saying:

Smith notes his battles that the MPAA was far more censuring...

I think you mean:

Smith notes that in his battles with the MPAA to get the rating approved, while the film contains almost-constant sexual references, the MPAA was far more censoriously censuring of homosexual sex references than the comparative, similar heterosexual sex references

Particularly as Jason Mewes was battling his drug addiction at the time
-- I think it would be better as:
Particularly as Jason Mewes was battling his own drug addiction at the time

He also hoped that by making a film dedicated to sex and fart jokes he would be able to enjoy being able to make an uncontroversial film free from the death threats...

-- this is a mess. Try simplifying:

He also hoped that by making a film dedicated to sex and fart jokes he would be free from the death threats...

proved not to be as uncontroversial as he had hoped
-->
proved more controversial than he had hoped

all-but completed excised -->
all but completely excised

When they finally find the right set the Bluntcave set is also a fantastic recreation -->
When they finally find the Bluntcave set, it is a fantastic recreation


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A87965860 - 'Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back' - the Film

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Bluebottle

smiley - taThanks again - all changes made. Nice and straightforward.

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