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A87965851 - 'Dogma' - the Film

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Bluebottle

Entry: 'Dogma' - the Film - A87965851
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

Queuing smiley - devilsmiley - angel

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A87965851 - 'Dogma' - the Film

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Gnomon - time to move on

Dogma

two exiled angels living in Wisconsin -- I think it would be clearer if you call them fallen angels

they will be allowed back into heaven having led blameless lives -->
they will be allowed back into heaven as though they had led blameless lives

Smith had been unable to cast his preferred choices for the film, intending Joey Lauren Adams to play Bethany, however as Linda Fiorentino had starred in the highly successful big budget blockbuster Men In Black (1997), she was the studio's preferred choice.
-- misuse of however. Best to split it up:

Smith was unable to cast his preferred choices for the film, intending Joey Lauren Adams to play Bethany. As Linda Fiorentino had starred in the highly successful big budget blockbuster Men In Black (1997), however, she was the studio's preferred choice.

Naturally Emma Thompson was considered to be God, however she was unavailable due to pregnancy and wishing to concentrate on her family.
-- misuse of however. Best to change it to "but":
Naturally Emma Thompson was considered to be God, but she was unavailable due to pregnancy and wished to concentrate on her family.

outside his budget as well as comfort zone -->
outside his budget as well as his comfort zone

Instead then head of Miramax -->
Instead the then head of Miramax

It's Dog-Eat-Dogma World -->
It's a Dog-Eat-Dogma World

I'm not sure that your explanation of Papal Infallability is correct. I'd say rather that the Pope is directly inspired by God when making statements 'ex cathedra' (with the full authority of office) so anything he says must be true.

It is the first film in the series to be a road movie, a format that would be repeated in later films, however the heaven and hell theme would not.
-- misuse of however. Use "although" instead.

Catholicism Wow! campaigns A Jaws homage -- there's a missing full stop after campaigns

Fans of Silent Bob and Jay expressed disappointed -->
Fans of Silent Bob and Jay expressed disappointment

in a similar way to Indiana Jones throws Nazis off
in a similar way to Indiana Jones throwing Nazis off

As with all films in the series there is a reference to Star Wars; Jay compares Bethany
-- the semicolon would be better as a colon, since the first part introduces the second part

You should remove the last sentence about Harvey Weinstein, since that court case is still in progress.

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A87965851 - 'Dogma' - the Film

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Bluebottle

Thanks for your comments. Most of the minor tweaks I've amended straight away.

The two areas that weren't so straight-forward are firstly that of Papal Infallibility – I've reworded this again in a way that is consistent with the film's interpretation (the film specifically quotes 'Whatever you bind on Earth shall be bound in Heaven' as meaning that they can get into Heaven rather than mentioning the Pope speaking 'ex Cathedra', you see).

The other is that Weinstein was found guilty of 'third-degree rape' and 'first-degree sexual assault' at his first trial today, so I've tweaked the last sentence accordingly. You are right, though, that we should uphold 'innocent until proven guilty'.

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A87965851 - 'Dogma' - the Film

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Gnomon - time to move on

I did actually write that just before the result of the trial was announced.


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Gnomon - time to move on

On the subject of Papal Infallability, it is certainly more important to present Kevin Smith's view of it than mine.smiley - smiley


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