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Post 61

Gnomon - time to move on

I apologise for not getting back to this, BigAl, but every time I look at it I am daunted by the size of the task. I don't know now which bits you wrote and which bits I assembled from all the various sources.

What I do know is that the Entry as written at the moment does not flow well - it's not a pleasure to read, is confusing, uses terms before they've been explained and needs a good "sub-editing". But there are no sub-editors assigned to updates, so it has to be 100% perfect before it can be accepted into the Guide.

Perhaps the best thing to do is for you to check that every statement in the entry as it stands fits in with commonly held theories, and then I'll go through it and do the equivalent of a sub-editor, pointing out formatting changes, without changing any of the content.

G


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Post 62

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

'I don't know now which bits you wrote and which bits I assembled from all the various sources.'

Well, as I recall, the bits I added to the original are shown in green type.


'Perhaps the best thing to do is for you to check that every statement in the entry as it stands fits in with commonly held theories...'

Well, the thing is, as I say, the recent archaeology completeyly overturns the commonbly held theories - to the extent that the Official Guide Book now needs to be re-written.

The task as I see it is to outline the previously held chronolology and then explain the new chronology. I think the Entry does do that. However, I will try and 'smooth it out' a bit more.

I dunno what terms are introduced without prior explanation. Most of 'em are self-explanataory when taken in context smiley - 2cents


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Post 63

Gnomon - time to move on

Well, there's the word "sarsen" for starters.


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Post 64

Gnomon - time to move on

And a quick comparison of even the first paragraphs of the update and the edited versions shows that you've changed around the order of the sentences without marking it in green; in my opinion, the new version reads worse than the original.


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Post 65

shagbark

it looks to me as if the phrase
>>considered to be one of the greatest engineering feats in prehistoric Europe, if not the greatest!<< is superflouous.
I like it better without it.


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Post 66

shagbark

also the last sentence before Astronomical alignments
>>This phase is remarkable because of the feat of transporting the stones (see later).<< seems to detract from the flow.


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Post 67

Gnomon - time to move on

I don't find that sentence superfluous, Shagbark. It gives a sense of the greatness of Stonehenge.


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Post 68

shagbark

I'm just giving my opinion. If others think differently so be it.


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Post 69

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Is this the same UPDATE that is currently on the Front Page? if so should it be removed from PR now?


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Post 70

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

No, it's not. This Update has stalled, primarily 'coz Gnomon doesn't like my suggested modifications. It's really awaiting a consensus from other PRr's.

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Post 71

shagbark

just for the sake of curriousity I copied this into Microsoft word and looked at the word count. This article has over 6400 words and would take 14 pages to print.
Most other hootoo articles of that length are split into smaller articles. That is not to suggest you split up this one. However it is one reason that it doesn't flow as well as some other pieces.
I have seen Articles in Encyclopedia Britanica with this level of detail and they don't flow well either.


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Post 72

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

Well, this is indicative of the complexity of Stonehenge, and the fact that after so many decvades of study, there are still more Qs than answers smiley - 2cents

Having said that, I have been thinking of removing the info about the Amesbury Archer from my suggested Update, and submitting it as a 'stand alone' Entry smiley - 2cents.


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Post 73

Z

Any progress yet?


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Post 74

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

BigAl is presently locked out of h2g2. He has tried various ways to get back in - he says the 'beeb is baffled' (message from him on the 25th Feb)


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Post 75

Malabarista - now with added pony

Now that Big Al is back, any progress here?


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Post 76

AlexAshman


smiley - boing


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Post 77

sprout

Did BigAl make it across?

sprout


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Post 78

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

I don't know about BigAl sprout, but we should wave this Entry in front of Gnomon I think. I seem to recall him mentioning something about it to me recently.


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Post 79

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

I am back in. Gnomon had asked me to colour code the bits I'd added so he could comparew them with his original, which I did. But the last discussion I had with him is that he couldn't tell which bits I'd added

Thinhg is, research at/of SH is very vibrant at the moment. New info/interpretations are coming out virtually monthly


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Post 80

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

See Posts 7 and 9 for discussion between Gnomon and I for marking out bits I'd added/changed.


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