A Conversation for The English tourist in France

Flea Market: A413542 The French

Post 1

Shellers (Master of wit and ready repartee)

This is my first attempt at an guide entry, and just want to see if I'm on the right lines.


A413542 The French

Post 2

Shellers (Master of wit and ready repartee)

Was I supposed to include a link like this http://www.h2g2.com/A413542 ?


A413542 The French

Post 3

Crescent

Amusing entry (and thank you for the link above smiley - smiley but it would better be called The British Tourist in France - it doesn't mention the French much at all smiley - smiley
BCNU - Crescent


A413542 The French and how to annoy them

Post 4

Shellers (Master of wit and ready repartee)

Thanks for the encouragement - I've always been interested in writing and having recently discovered h2g2 it looks like a good, interesting place to start.

2cv


A413542 The French and how to annoy them

Post 5

Munchkin

Yeh, more about the bad English tourist than the French. Nice wee article though. Perhaps want to try and expand it a bit, other stupid things tourists do, are Americans better/worse, are there a race of tourists who don't do this sort of stuff, that sort of thing. I like what is there mind, it made me chuckle.


A413542 The English tourist in France

Post 6

Shellers (Master of wit and ready repartee)

Okay point taken - the entry has now been retitled but I've limited it to the English as I won't tar everyone with the same brush.


A413542 How Not to Be a Tourist in France

Post 7

Administrator-General (5+0+9)*3+0

The link definitely helps, thanks.

And this is exactly the sort of information that belongs in a Hitchhiker's Guide. I'd have organized it in smaller paragraphs or bullets, but that may be just me.


A413542 How Not to Be a Tourist in France

Post 8

Wampus

Looks good to me. The only comment I have is the line at the end which says, "I've seen...etc."

The H2G2 powers-that-be frown a bit on using "I" or "me" references. Would you be so kind as to rephrase that one?

Wampus


A413542 How Not to Be a Tourist in France

Post 9

Shellers (Master of wit and ready repartee)

Okay, it's been amended - thanks for the advice.


A413542 How Not to Be a Tourist in France

Post 10

John the gardener says, "Free Tibet!"

This is an amusing list, but I think it would make a better entry if you were to give it a more substantial introduction. I think you need to explain the context of this stereotype a little bit for the benefit of those amongst us who may be unfamiliar with it. In general, the tendency to make reinforcing prejudices about foreigners a highlight of any holiday abroad is a recognizable, if somewhat lamentable, trait of tourists wherever they are from.smiley - smiley

JTG


A413542 How Not to Be a Tourist in France

Post 11

John the gardener says, "Free Tibet!"

This is an amusing list, but I think it would make a better entry if you were to give it a more substantial introduction. I think you need to explain the context of this stereotype a little bit for the benefit of those amongst us who may be unfamiliar with it. In general, the tendency to make reinforcing prejudices about foreigners a highlight of any holiday abroad is a recognizable, if somewhat lamentable, trait of tourists wherever they are from.smiley - smiley

JTG


A413542 How Not to Be a Tourist in France

Post 12

Monsignore Pizzafunghi Bosselese

Sleeping deep down in the Workshop, a good smiley - laugh !

As it is at the moment I'd say it's worded in a sarcastic touch, rather than conveying factual information. You could aim at the Post or 'So long, and thanks for laughing' in the present form. But with a bit of intro and outro you can make stuff for the Edited Guide out of it smiley - smiley

just my tuppence anyway

Bossel (Scout)


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Post 13

h2g2 auto-messages

Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'The Writing Workshop' to 'The Flea Market'.

...as the author of this entry seems to have 'left the building'.


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