A Conversation for Babies Milk Travelled Well
Just read your article...
MrRollyPollyCat Started conversation Dec 7, 2004
I just read your article, and I think it's good. The one problem, and this is kind of a big one, is that your story is pretty hard to follow. If you could add some sort of topic paragraph, perhaps a thesis at the beginning of your article, it would give your readers a focus throughout the article.
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