h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Nice yarn Marv. I would like to know more about this place. Make your article make me book the air ticket

Since you asked, a few suggestions.

Break it up into paragraphs for easy reading.

Does the unusual name Moab mean anything? If it does maybe mention why the city got its name.

You use opinion a lot during the yarn. h2g2 does not want opinion. I am putting together a rejection slip guide entry which will link rejection slips, and the reason the yarn was rejected, to the original story. I believe this will help put researchers on the right track. With 3 rejection slips posted so far, I am a bit of an expert in the rejection field,

They want structured, factual, interesting articles. Probably the easiest way to explain what constitutes a likely successful h2g2 official guide entry is the 5 "W" rule. Who, Why, What, When, Where. Try and cover those 5 points in your submitted articles. Not neccessarily in that order.

Hope that helps.

Loony

Thanks a bunch for the advice I will look into the changes you recommend. BTW Moab I think is some kind of Biblacle reference. I see that I need to get out of the habbit of writing for myself. I will let you know when I update the entry. -marv

Take a look at it when you get a chance and tell me what you think about the changes made. Your comments were valid and I tried to make this a more factual and less subjective peice. -marv

I copied it and did a bit of editing, spell checking in Word. I have sent it to you via ICQ but it may be too long. If you give me your email address via ICQ I will email my edited version to you.

just came from looking over your article and must say it is quite good
i did not see it before the editing but it does look like you and looney did quite a good job as it is quite informative
i enjoy happening upon articles that i learn something from and this is one of them
monsy

Monsy, you pop up everywhere. I am sure Marv will be pleased you visited his little corner of the web.

Next you will be going white-water rafting in Utah. If that is not scary enough for you you may want to peruse my bungee jumping yarn.

Loony

Then you can go Slick Rock biking and then rock climbing. We will keep you busy risking your life for the next few years.

but i am ascared of dangerous stuffs
monsy

Awwww, that's ok. You can take the practice trail on Slickrock. It is not as bad as the rest of the trails around the area.

*takes notice of the name of this rock*
"slickrock"???? ermmmm.......my but it sounds as if it might be a tad bit on the ermmm....slippery side!!!
monsy

Slickrock is sandstone. It is very fun to ride on. You should do it. The rock it self is rather abrasive, you don't want to fall off of your bike.

Nice work Marv, paints a very favorable picture of Moab. One question: is the Fat Tire Festival related to my favorite beer, Fat Tire? Have you ever had one?

BTW, something looks wrong with your formatting - the paragraphs look kind of messed up!

I don't know about the beer, but Colorado is a good place to ride as well, so it is probably related to that. As for the formatting I will re-format it in GML and see how it looks. I have noticed that the guide is a little Netscape unfriendly, so it may look good to me and not to you. I will look at in IE and Opera as well.

Thanks for pointing me here. I've enjoyed your article.
As said in ICQ, I will see it for myself before too long.

Hi Marv
I just stumbled across your entry about Moab, and it took me right back to two of the most enthralling days of my life - driving up through Monument Valley, and spending about 6 hours at Arches National Park (which of course is nowhere near as long as you really need). Breathtaking! I can't wait to get back to that red rock country again, so thanks for bringing some very pleasant memories back to the surface with such a well written piece

I love the area very much. I once lived in Moab and was surrounded by the best scenery in the wolrd. I was able to appreciate it well. The red rock is the greatest IMHO. I am going to go visit it agin soon for a holliday longer than three days for a change. Glad you liked the yarn.

Marv

I liked the yarn very much. The thing is, I wasn't even planning to visit that area until I bumped into someone over coffee and doughnuts at a motel near Monterrey, CA about a week earlier. He insisted that it would be a journey I wouldn't forget in a hurry, and well worth the detour. He wasn't wrong! When he mentioned Monument Valley I kind of remembered it from all those John Wayne films, and when I got to the southern end at Kayenta, it was about 3pm and the sky had those big puffy white clouds dotted around it. I'm not entirely sure if I'm remembering all of this in the right sequence, but I recall being astounded by the rock formations at a place called Mexican Hat, and then stopping off at Bluff, and The Navajo Twin Rocks around 7pm(ish). I felt the most incredible calm and peacefulness around that area. I stayed in a motel a bit further north, and went to Arches the next day, but I couldn't stay as long as I would have wanted if I'd known just how beautiful it is. I was very sad to leave the red rocks behind for the delights (?) of a Motel 6 in Gallup, but the trip I took the next day through The Painted Desert and Petrified Forest made up for it. It's truly a wonderful corner of this country.

It was a lucky break for you then. If you ever get the chance go visit Goblin Valleywhich was featured in Galaxy Quest. It is a cool realm of sandstone spires. Unforgettable.

Thanks, I'll add it to the long list of other places in that region which I plan to visit someday

Do you have any pictures to post?