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Entry: Theatre Improvisation. - A14590910
Author: Aximili - U4646274

This is another entry I got from the Flea Market. I've added a little and corrected some minor mistakes. Can you tell me what you think?

Yes I think this is fine tells you every thing you need to know. In my opinion very good.

Thanks Bob. Should I move it to Peer Review or do you think that more could be done?

Let others look suggest and I will look in from time to time. There is a lot of talent out there so wait fro more reviews before PR. It can be a rough passage in the PR so dont be in a hurry...

NB I an talking a matter of 7 - 10 days. The time will fly by.

Thank you for the advice.

looks good Aximili,
might benifit from some headers

I thought so too, but decided to wait for a second oinion. I'll get right on it

See what I mean

Yup. I've put some headers in now. How's it looking?

Much better

Great!

Happy now its a good entry, about Thursday check with your ace then go for PR if you are happy

Thanks for the advice, Bob.

Any time fel free to say Hi pop over to my space and say hello

Will do.

Hi Aximili

A few points: firstly, could you remove any tags from the entry? They're not generally used in the Edited Guide, and the tags will break up your paragraphs as necessary.

You use the word "blocking" to refer to rejecting an idea, but to me blocking in theatre means non-improv movement in a play. Perhaps you could put in a footnote or something drawing the distinction, because it momentarily confused me.

Perhaps you should mention different improv games - I know that children's acting classes and youth theatre make good use of these.

Lastly, in the first paragraph you mention "Smack the Pony" and don't elaborate on what that is - you should.

A great start, though!

Hows the editing process going looks like you have had some good advice

Yeah. I've added the headers and put in a little about improv games. What do you think?