A Conversation for The Mountains of Denver, Colorado, U.S.A.

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Post 1

The Ghost Of TV's Frink

Hi, thanks for reading this article. Any comments would be greatly appreciated!


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Fenchurch M. Mercury

Well, it's an overall good acticle, but the activites section is pretty skimpy... Do you know of any specific ski resorts, or restaurants, or more original/regional activites, or anything like that? It would seem a lot more personal...

I like the whole "The Mountains are West" thing though smiley - smiley


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The Ghost Of TV's Frink

The "Mountains are West" thing was the actual reason for writing the article. Like I told J-T-G, I seem to have trouble writing really informative stuff, so I just listed the activities as a lead-in.

It probably would make the article stronger to go into more detail, but I don't know if I can make myself do it. I figure I'll just submit it as is, then when the editors reject it next week, I can add the details.

Don't ask me how I will get the editors to reject it so soon - haven't figured that one out yet...


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Post 4

Tweek

True, the mountains are the mainstay for directions in Denver. However, because of this, everyone just
says, "go west, then turn north," not "go towards the mountains and turn right." And, of course, everyone
knows which way west and north are, because the mountains are...always to the west. Maybe you can
go into detail on this point. But, what would I know, I'm just from Denver.


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The Ghost Of TV's Frink

Good point Tweek. Welcome back, by the way. Remember, I only lived in Denver, I wasn't born there, so I forget things like this sometimes. I think I will update the article to make it correct when I have time (probably not Monday or Tuesday, as you know!)


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Fenchurch M. Mercury

Well, a lot of your stuff is good, it's just not "scientific", but not everything in life is that way, either. I'm sure the guide will go mad if all it had was information about insects and no games, or vice versa. And what would you do with bug and games if there werent my travel tips about cities you can pass this information on to? *shameless self-promotion: Coming soon: Mexico D.F. ^and^ the Amazing Pyramids located two hours away* Different styles are fun. J-T-G just knows a lot of stuff. It amazes me, too smiley - smiley. He told me something about a Dalai Lama the other day, and to that point I didn't even know how to spell "Dalai Lama" right smiley - bigeyes.

Well, maybe you could rearrange the article, then, so it doesn't look like the activites are supposed to be the main thing... maybe you could do the whole direction thing first, and then say "of course, the mountains could be used for entertainment, too" or something like that?


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John the gardener says, "Free Tibet!"

Good stuff, Frink. The comments about the details have merit; but be careful not to spoil the rhythm of the thing: it has a nice cadence. One thing I noticed, if I may, "temperatures rise" seemed a bit odd to me. Wouldn't "temperature rises" be better. Perhaps I missed the point. It's possible to nit-pick a thing to death. I liked it! JTG


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Post 8

Frustreren

I... uhh... don't really have anything new to say. I've got to agree w/ Fenchurch in that it should be rearranged so the activities come at the end - simply because that's the subject, that's how it should end.

Anyhow, other than that it really flows well. Perhaps a few more specifics??? I don't know... I just write about cookies...

smiley - fish


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The Ghost Of TV's Frink

Ohhhhhh...but the activities aren't the point, at least, not the point I was going for. Using the mountains to keep your bearings, that was going to be the point. Perhaps I need to rewrite somehow to make it more clear. I have to rewrite some anyway, Tweek pointed out that I misstated how we get around Denver. I'll get to that this weekend.

Thanks for stopping by Frustreren!


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The Ghost Of TV's Frink

Oh, and I like the new look for your page, Frustreren!


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Post 11

Frustreren

Ahhhh.. the direction not the activities... it all makes sense to me now... So the pt. of the article was at the end... hmmm...

Thank you very much. I've finally learned the wonders of creating tables using HTML and the new horizons that have opened up seem, for the time being, to be endless...


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Post 12

The Ghost Of TV's Frink

Hi everyone! I've revised the mountain article a bit, to make it more correct factually, and hopefully I've put clearer emphasis on the main point of the article. Does it work better now?

Thanks in advance.


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Post 13

Fenchurch M. Mercury

Yeah, now it doesn't seem as patchy, and the paragraphs flow better. Did you do the BBC thing? smiley - winkeye Good job.


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Post 14

Tweek

Well done. I have no more suggestions except for you to submit this bad boy and start the eternal clock of waiting to hear back. As Chris Berman says, "TICK tick-tick-tick-tick." He also says, "wop," but that's not really relevant here.


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Post 15

The Ghost Of TV's Frink

Done and done.


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John the gardener says, "Free Tibet!"

Nice job. The point you make about the significance of the mountains to the people in Denver comes across clearly now. It's not overpowered by the weight of information on things to do *in* the mountains. Excellent!

Now the hard part... the wait. smiley - winkeye

JTG


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