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good characters...

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ex-Rambling. Thingite. Dog. Pythonist. Deceased.

smiley - ghost

good voice and personality.

needs tightening. You kind of overwhelm the reader with too much info-
I'd shorten it and put in a plot.

You have the dialogue and characters down perfect.


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