A Conversation for Doctor Who Enemies: Cassandra

Peer Review: A87850353 - Doctor Who Enemies: Cassandra

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Bluebottle

Entry: Doctor Who Enemies: Cassandra - A87850353
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

The latest in the 'Doctor Who' series.

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SashaQ - happysad

Fascinating... I've not seen either of these episodes.

Footnote 3 is odd.

What is a half-life man?


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Bluebottle

I deleted footnote 3 as it didn't really work in Pliny or show properly in a footnote, which is a shame as I thought it was a good joke for Red Dwarf fans. I've added an explanation as to what a half-life man is (not someone radioactive, but a clone with a limited life-span).

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Hi BB. Congratulations on writing this, which I enjoyed immensely. I think you have captured her very well indeed, she was ruthless and cruel and yet, when she died, I was sad. I also loved the times when she jumped into the bodies of Rose and The Doctor. Especially their snog and The Doctor's reaction. Those episodes showed off the great acting abilities of Billie Piper, Christopher Eccleston and David Tennant. I'd watch the episodes featuring Cassandra again in a heartbeat and I'm sure you'd enjoy them, Sasha!smiley - ok

Queries/nitpicks:

>>Born the son of a Texan father and a mother from the Arctic Desert, she grew up in the Los Angeles Crevasse. Her parents were the last people to be buried on Earth. In her lifetime she has had at least five husbands and is not phased by changing sex,<<
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"Born the son" don't you mean "daughter"? (You do use the feminine pronouns throughout). Or is her sex ambiguous with all the nipping and tucking? Maybe better to say "Born to a Texan father and a mother from the Arctic Desert"

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>>Her impact was great enough that show-runner Russell T Davies chose her to be the recurring villain introduced at the start of the revived show's second series as a means of helping young audience adapt to the new Doctor and reassure them that he was the same character.<<
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helping *a* young audience

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>>although oo curves, oh baby, it's like living in a bouncy castle<<
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I am not sure what "oo curves" are? I think that "oo" should be "oh"

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Thanks BB. I now can't hear 'Toxic' by Britney Spears on the radio without thinking of the Earth being enveloped by the gigantic red sun thanks to that episode. I was blown away by the graphics and the new monsters, I loved Chris Eccleston's Doctor and was gutted when he left, but David Tennant more than made up for any disappointmentsmiley - drool

GB
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Bluebottle

Thanks for your lovely comments there GB – I'm glad you enjoyed the Cassandra episodes as much as I did.smiley - smiley

Cassandra says that she was once a little boy,
'Soon, the sun will blossom into a red giant, and my home will die. That's where I used to live, when I was a little boy, down there. Mummy and Daddy had a little house built into the side of the Los Angeles Crevice. I'd have such fun.'
Which following the reference of 'Mummy and Daddy' I assume was the gender she had at birth, but other than that always refers to herself in the feminine and when she is seen as a human adult she is definitely female. I just followed her example. If she's had 708 operations it doesn't seem unlikely that one/some of these were sex change operations.

smiley - modI am not sure what "oo curves" are? I think that "oo" should be "oh"
It is definitely an 'oo' like 'Typhoo' not an 'oh' rhymes with snow (and not an 'ew' as in smelly smiley - footprints)

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SashaQ - happysad

>>Born the son of a Texan father and a mother from the Arctic Desert, she grew up in the Los Angeles Crevasse. Her parents were the last people to be buried on Earth. In her lifetime she has had at least five husbands and is not phased by changing sex,<<

The episodes do sound interesting indeed - I hadn't noticed the mention of "son", but I like the way that sounds. I think just a bit of tweak is needed, as she grew up as a boy, then became a lady, so she is "not fazed by changing sex and takes possession of the bodies of [someone male] and [someone female]."

I like the word "oo" and "ooo" as well, but I think the official spelling is "ooh".

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Bluebottle

Thanks, I've tweaked those bits accordingly.

I fancy a smiley - teasmiley - chocolateteapot now...

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SashaQ - happysad

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