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Bluebottle Started conversation May 15, 2015
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Digital Led . . ignorance is bliss Posted May 21, 2015
barging in (hands washed)
>>At age of 8 was taken to stare into
Who, where why? I think there is a name missing, as it is a newline there is no reference.
At _the_ age of 8 ... was taken to stare into
Doctor or Master? Master as I remember the story, as well as it is the Masters 'Childhood' however, not really clear.
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>>a TARDIS of his own, one that is not only more advanced
What more advances are there ?
Perhaps a 'see below' link pointing to
The paragraph ( anchoring)
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>>The Clangers
Never heard of, perhaps link to < A246241 > 'Stop-motion Animation Programmes' There is a section about 'The Clangers'
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>>Red Nose Day
Is not really a world wide known event, perhaps a link or
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>>Teletubbies
Reference to < A901027 > *'Teletubbies' - the TV Programme*
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>>and even appeared spin-off series Torchwood
and even appeared _in_ spin-off series Torchwood (?)
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>>alien menacesSuch as Axons, Daleks, Autons and Cybermen.
Thought we were supposed to use full sentences, in the list this makes no sense at all.
I guess I have most of the episodes on tape or disc, do not feel in the mood to watch the entire series however.
Adapted a little, was by
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Bluebottle Posted May 21, 2015
Some good points made there – as soon as Captcha allows me to update the/any entry, I’ll make some changes.
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Bluebottle Posted May 21, 2015
It only took 2 hours.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted May 25, 2015
Hi Bluebottle.
Here are a few comments:
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Content:
An insert scene shows a ring falling from the Master's hand and being picked up, showing he once again found a way to cheat his apparent demise.
-- might it be worth adding that this is a reference to the death of Ming the Merciless in the film Flash Gordon, in which a similar scene occurs?
As Lucy 'bore his biometrical signature imprint7' this can be traced on her lips. -- I'm not sure what you mean here. It seems to say that because Lucy bore the Master's biometrical signature, it was possible to trace something on her lips. Or do you mean that they used a biometrical trace on Lucy's lips to help reconstruct the Master? A bit of rewording needed either way.
What has the section about Michelle Gomez to do with the Master? Is she the Master in female form? If so, you should state this. At the moment it looks like you're talking about another Doctor Who opponent.
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Choice of words, Punctuation:
This had originally been intended to feature Anthony Ainley as the Master, although as he had died in 2004 a different actor was cast for its audio adaptation.
-- "although" is the wrong word here. I think "but" would be better.
"should be introduced a Moriarty to the Doctor's Sherlock Holmes" -- there should be some sort of punctuation between "introduced" and "a". A colon is probably best, although you'd get away with a comma.
the four beat heartbeat --> the four-beat heartbeat
Though this had apparently contradicted previous claims that the Master had run out of regenerations; the next episode
-- that should be a comma, not a semicolon. You can only use a semicolon if the sections on each side of it can stand on their own as separate sentences.
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SashaQ - happysad Posted May 27, 2015
I saw Terror of the Autons this morning, so thought I'd review this Entry - very interesting indeed
"the Master acquired a new TARDIS which he disguised as a frozen invader called Melkur"
What does that mean? The TARDIS was a block of ice?
The man who was pushed off the radio telescope didn't die, I don't think, as they checked his pulse and said something about taking him to hospital...
Did the part from the Master's TARDIS not fix the Doctor's?
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Bluebottle Posted May 28, 2015
Good points - I'll try updating the article with these points once I get home, if Captcha allows me.
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Bluebottle Posted Jun 1, 2015
Took a while to beat Ca...
Added a reference and link to classic film Flash Gordon.
I've also reworded the Lucy Saxon bit, clarified about Missy.
The Punctuation tweaks don't really need mentioning.
By the way, 'Terror of the Autons' isn't the only occasion on which the Master has pushed someone off a radio telescope. In fact, that's how Tom Baker's Doctor dies, before regenerating into Peter Davison.
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Bluebottle Posted Sep 9, 2015
No point in this one being recommended now until after this series of Doctor Who, and I've made the amendments as necessary. Missy is set to return…
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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Dec 27, 2015
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h2g2 Guide Editors Posted Dec 28, 2015
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Peer Review: A87843829 - UPDATE A20361647 Doctor Who Enemies: The Master
- 1: Bluebottle (May 15, 2015)
- 2: Digital Led . . ignorance is bliss (May 21, 2015)
- 3: Bluebottle (May 21, 2015)
- 4: Bluebottle (May 21, 2015)
- 5: Gnomon - time to move on (May 25, 2015)
- 6: SashaQ - happysad (May 27, 2015)
- 7: Bluebottle (May 28, 2015)
- 8: Bluebottle (Jun 1, 2015)
- 9: Bluebottle (Sep 9, 2015)
- 10: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Dec 27, 2015)
- 11: Bluebottle (Dec 27, 2015)
- 12: h2g2 Guide Editors (Dec 28, 2015)
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