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Bluebottle

Entry: The Ultimate DreamWorks Animated Film Guide: 2005-2009 - A87856870
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

Part II.

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SashaQ - happysad

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I think I haven't yet seen Part 1, but anyway...

What does Logo mean in the tables?

Ah - I was confused by the Wallace and Gromit table then, but of course it is a co-production with Aardman, so the film is in both. The Plot in the table needs updating as before smiley - ok

In Shrek, "Shrek, an ogre married to a princess (Mike Myers)" - you could say Princess Fiona

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SashaQ - happysad

Madagascar is listed as a sequel to Madagascar 2!

Planet Claire is an odd song that intrigued me because of the Mancini mention - I listened to it and hadn't heard it before, but at the same time I had heard it before smiley - weird I'd like a footnote on Mancini to say that he got writing credits because of part of Peter Gunn being used in it. I also get the feeling that someone else got writing credits similarly because a bit of their song was also used in it, but I can't place that one, and it could be that someone used it in a later song rather than this song using it from an earlier song...

B.O.B has dots in at the first mention, but then not - should there be?

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Gnomon - time to move on

Dreamworks

I haven't seen any of these so I can't say much about the content. I can, however, point out a few typos.

concentrate on making on computer animation -->
concentrate on computer animation

DreamWorks had signed a deal with Aardman Animations, agreeing to finance and distribute five feature-length films -->

DreamWorks had signed a five-film deal with Aardman Animations, agreeing to finance and distribute five feature-length films

The first of which --> The first of these

A Bugs Life --> A Bug's Life

We plow the fields -- should that be 'plough'?

'Bohemian Like You written by Courtney Taylor -- missing a closing quote

adopted to CGI --> adapted to CGI

You have Shrek and Shrek 2 listed as sequels to Shrek 3. Later, you have Madagascar listed as a sequel to Madagascar 2.

the next king. Even though --> the next king, even though

Rumplestiltskin --> Rumpelstiltskin

Change the comma after the first Rumpelstiltskin to a semicolon.

The Furious Five -- there should be a bullet point before this phrase.

Madagascar does The Lion King. -- this looks as if you've left out some words in this sentence.

Should B.O.B be B.O.B. ?

written and Performed by --> written and performed by

Beverley Hills --> Beverly Hills

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Post 5

Bluebottle

Thanks both – I've made the various changes as suggested, and will only comment on points that I think need further comment. (Part I is still in Peer Review as we speak).

The logo section in the table is there because, although the standard DreamWorks Animation logo, like its parent, is a boy on the moon fishing, in many of their films this has been tweaked. So for instance, in 'Monster vs Aliens' the boy is abducted by a UFO, in 'Bee Movie' he is attacked by a bee etc.

Wallace and Gromit plot updated as per the Aardman one.

Was this comment the other way round?:
DreamWorks had signed a deal with Aardman Animations, agreeing to finance and distribute five feature-length films -->
DreamWorks had signed a five-film deal with Aardman Animations, agreeing to finance and distribute five feature-length films

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Gnomon - time to move on

Sorry, I made a note of that comment on my phone, then re-typed it into my laptop before posting. Yes I got it wrong.

I meant that you should remove "five-film" from the description of the deal because you mention five films later in the sentence.


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Post 7

Bluebottle

That's fine - I must admit you confused me for a secondsmiley - laugh

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SashaQ - happysad

Just reading this again, as it will be an asset to the Guide smiley - ok

In the second paragraph, you could perhaps emphasise that Aardman didn't do cel animation either.

You need a mention at the top about what the bold text means in the tables.

Fascinating! I read about Cedric the Entertainer in one of the Charlotte Yonge Entry specials when I was browsing the other day - I thought he was perhaps some mediaeval minstrel, but apparently not!

"RJ recruits a group of hibernating animals whose forest has been all-but demolished to create a new housing estate to gather food, encouraging them to believe he is gathering the food for winter."

There's a lot going on in this sentence, and I'm not sure I follow it... The animals are woken up from hibernation to gather food for the winter?

"Oogway announces he will decide who will be the one to defeat Tai Lung by learning the secrets of the Dragon Scroll and becoming the Dragon Warrior"

It's not Oogway who is the Dragon Warrior?

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Post 9

Bluebottle

Okay, I give up. What's the link between Cedric the Entertainer and Charlotte Yonge?

I've changed this in line with your suggestions. I didn't actually say that Aardman didn't do cel animation – as they have dabbled slightly on a small scale – but emphasised that they specialise in stop-motion and were moving into CGI instead, which is perhaps truer.

Yes, in 'Over the Hedge', as soon as the animals awake from hibernation, they start gathering food for winter.

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SashaQ - happysad

This A87866563smiley - biggrin

Thanks for the tweaks smiley - ok


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SashaQ - happysad

I discovered the mosquito is Mooseblood, not Mouseblood smiley - ok


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Post 12

Bluebottle

smiley - dohYep, it is.
Corrected now.

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SashaQ - happysad

smiley - ok

Another quick read of this - I think it is very nearly ready to be picked smiley - ok

You have a Seingeld in the Bee Movie table instead of Seinfeld.

"The film also looks at the role of role models and idols"

The *importance* of role models?

"A confident film, by having the central character a panda while his father is a goose practically announces the intention of resolving any unanswered questions with a sequel."

*it* practically announces?

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Post 14

Bluebottle

smiley - dohThose have been corrected now.

If this is picked, it'll be a race to see which of my animated film projects is completely picked and polished first: DreamWorks or Disney.

On your marks, get set:
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Gnomon - time to move on

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Post 17

Bluebottle

smiley - wowYay!
I wonder which animation studio I'll look at next – Blue Sky, Illumination, Ghibli, Laika? Or after Aardman, Disney, DreamWorks and Pixar, have I definitely overstayed my welcome?

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SashaQ - happysad

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I'd vote for Illumination!


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