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A87834405 - What happens to your room while you are gone
StarSeeker Started conversation Jul 17, 2014
Entry: What happens to your room while you are gone - A87834405
Author: StarSeeker - U15000431
I'm still trying to find a shorter title...
A87834405 - What happens to your room while you are gone
minorvogonpoet Posted Jul 17, 2014
I like this. It's not only funny but has the feel of beng well-observed. I suspect you are an older brother.
Mind you I would never try to use my son's bedroom for anything because I can hardly get through the door.
One or two nitpicks. 
The sentence beginning 'Your mother got once' should be 'Your mother once got desperate and lent'.
The sentence beginning 'That's the clothes basket' should be 'That's because the clothes basket.'
A87834405 - What happens to your room while you are gone
StarSeeker Posted Jul 17, 2014
Actually, I'm an older sister, and my mum is currently using my room to stash there everything from the living room, because she wants to repaint the walls
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Thanks for 'nitpicks'.
I should work on my word order. I'm not quite sure where the 'there' in the sentence up there belongs.
A87834405 - What happens to your room while you are gone
minorvogonpoet Posted Jul 18, 2014
Have you tried sending this to 
? Dmitri might be glad to get it
A87834405 - What happens to your room while you are gone
StarSeeker Posted Jul 18, 2014
Well, the idea never actually crossed my mind.
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