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Posted Jul 1, 2009 by  aka Bel | | Post: 1
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Hello Danny, I've prepared your excellent story for its spot on the FP.
There were just very few typos I corrected, but I have a couple of questions (or three):
1) The title. Correct spelling would be Devilish (one l). Do you want to keep your spelling?
2) This sentence:
>>Or, in plain English, he was hit on the back of the head until he was killed.<<
To me, it implies that he was first hit and then killed. Do you think plain English would be 'hit until he was dead'? I know the result is the same, but (at least to me) the implication is different. It may be only me, though. Let me know what you think.
3) >>>"I hope you're going to include me in these memoirs," asked Mackrell as they walked down the corridor<<
It's not really a question, should it maybe either have a question mark, or possibly be: 'said' instead of 'asked'?
I've haven't altered any of the above (except for the title, but I can easily change that back), your call.
Your story is here:
A53919606
Bel
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Posted Jul 2, 2009 by Danny B
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Arg - sorry Bel! I read this then forgot about it... 
Let's see...
Point 1)
Change of title is fine (and thanks for pointing that out  )
Point 2)
Hmm... I know what you mean, but 'dead' doesn't have a double letter! It's a little bit awkward ('dead' would be more normal), but I'd rather keep it 
Point 3)
Changing the comma after 'memoirs' into a question mark should fix it, I think.
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Posted Jul 2, 2009 by aka Bel
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Oh, yes, I forgot about the double letter.
OK, question mark put and off it goes then.
See this on the FP soon, I hope.
Don't forget to subscribe to your story.
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Posted Jul 2, 2009 by Danny B
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Subscribed!
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Posted Jul 2, 2009 by aka Bel
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Good. Now all you have to do is to write a few more stories like that. 
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Posted Jul 2, 2009 by Danny B
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That depends on a) what the last Stretcher challenge is; and b) if I make it through to the last round 
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Posted Jul 2, 2009 by aka Bel
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I can't answer either, but why do you confine yourself to Stretcher challenges and whether or not you'll make the final round?
I wasn't in the Stretcher in the first place, yet I took up the ideas, and have started writing unrelated things even: A53733279
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Posted Jul 3, 2009 by Danny B
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It's all to do with motivation. I used to write a lot, but having been a full-time (medical) writer for the last 9 years, the desire to spend my spare time writing as well just isn't there. I entered the Stretcher to see if it would help to motivate me, and I'll see the competition through to its end, but I still have no particular impetus or inspiration to write anything else.
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Posted Jul 3, 2009 by aka Bel
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Yes, I understand that (I think ).
I never had any intention to write but found it is quite fun. But then I don't have to write anything, so that's very different.
Still, I'm always amazed at just how many people on here want to write a book. I'm already glad when I manage to write something that contains more then 300 words. 
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