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Posted Jun 10, 2008 by BeowulfShaffer | | Post: 1
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Entry: Brave New World in progres - A34875958
Author: BeowulfShaffer - U10890736
I had to take an month and a half break from writing this in which I forgot much of what I new about brave new world I think I could finish it with out help but would really prefer it if I could get some help from people who are more experienced writers and/or have more current knolge about brave new world
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Posted Jun 10, 2008 by Elentari
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This looks like a good start.
Here are a few points:
Firstly, run it through a spellchecker. There are a few errors.
"neo-palovian techniques." - shouldn't it be neo-Pavlovian? I may be misremembering his name though.
"He is also an Alpha and has the intelligence of one but has a very short stature which in the World State is usually associated with the lower castes."
You havent explained what the castes are. I think this would fit in quite well at the beginning when you talk about the setting of the book.
"Lenita is a vaccination worker at the London hatchery." - if I remember rightly, she's also pretty stupid.
""His Fordship" Mustapha Monds" - you need to explain the worshipping of Ford, or this makes no sense.
"He is outwardly a great propent of the world state" - propent isn't a word. I don't know what you mean by this.
"John is from a savage reservation" - I think you need to explain about the roles of savages in the book and its society.
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Posted Jun 10, 2008 by aka Bel
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It's been a few years since I last read the book (about ten years, at a rough guess), so my recollections are rather vague.
Will be interesting to watch your entry grow. 
Thanks. I ran it through a spell checker before posting it the writing workshop but it was a pretty crummy one that I just used because it works in my browser without me having to copy my entry to a word prossecer.
I made most of the changes suggested and plan to make the rest when I log back on latter. I would like to know of you guys think it would be a good idea to put the section on themes before character and plot to clear up things like why Monds is called his Fordship and why it is such a big deal that the DHC has a kid.
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Posted Jun 11, 2008 by Elentari
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It might be, yeah. Try it and if it doesn't work, you can always move it.
I tried it.
Did it work out?
I have added a little bit more meat to the characters and themes sections though they still are not quite there yet. I also starting to think that brave new world is a little sexist there are more major male characters than female ones and the females lead characters are less positively portrayed(Lenita and John's crazy old mother vs. Monds, John Bernard, Hemholz, the DHC and mabey Pope if you want to stretch the idea of main charater abit). Does anyone have any opinion on the sexism issue or any other advice?
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Posted Jun 16, 2008 by Elentari
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I think that arrangement is better. You still have a lot of spelling mistakes (more than you did before, actually).
I blame the amrican public school system for my spelling mistakes but will try to fix them if you can give me spesseic examples or I get better spellchecher. I am glad you like the new format and since I like it to will keep it that way unless I get some major objections.
I have added a link to the entry on dystopain novels and added some more information to the section on the purpose of human existance but am not sure if I should add more detials about the discusion between John and Mond since it is pretty importand but dosen't make much sense until unless you are alread fammilar with thoose charaters.
If anybody can clearly rember the plot that would be helpfull
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Posted Nov 26, 2008 by  U168592
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How you doing with this one Beo?
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Posted May 19, 2009 by Tufty
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Beowulf, I reckon you've got what it takes to finish this entry, provided you get a copy of the book and perhaps do a little reading about the book's themes and purpose, perhaps on the web. We can worry about spelling later on - for now, you'll get the most out of this if you can make the entry a little more finished.
Please post if you've got any specific questions - otherwise, it's better if you get it written and then ask what others think of it
Alex
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Posted Jun 30, 2009 by Tufty
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Posted Aug 9, 2012 by Bluebottle
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I'd like to propose Flea Market for this article as the author has  ed and not been around for over a year.
As this month's Create theme is books, putting this in the Flea Market might lead to a prompt rescue - I know of at least one researcher who would love to rescue this article 
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Agreed.
Moving this one now to FM
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