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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Dec 20, 2008 by
Still_WRD
 
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Entry: Photuris - A45100027
Author: Still_WRD - U1665007

This one's along the same lines as Werewolf, but I like that there's an actual animal that does this.

The fireflies you see blinking in the air of a summer night are males. Each species has a different code they blink. Females lie in the grass and blink and if the male flies over and sees his code being blinked up at him, he goes down to mate.
"Photuris is a genus of fireflies wherein are the femme fatale fireflies of North America. This common name refers to the fact that the females of these predatory beetles mimic the light signals of other firefly species' males, to attract, kill, and eat them."
P.S. Huzzah for wikipedia.

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Dec 20, 2008 by Online Now
Dmitri Gheorgheni
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rofl I think this one is funny.

Especially the ending.

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Dec 21, 2008 by
minorvogonpoet
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I thought there was a difference in tone between the two stanzas. The first stanza suggests a firefly (woman?) who can't find a love.

In the second, the trap is sprung and we're not quite sure which won the battle of the sexes. Unless I've misunderstood as usualerm .

It still works as a poem! smiley

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Dec 23, 2008 by
Tibley Bobley
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Ghastlyrofl

I can only sympathise with the poor male beetle. What a horrible surprise, to find the gal giving him the glad eye or winking at him seductively, only wants him for one thing - and it ain't love.

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Jan 3, 2009 by
Still_WRD
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I guess the idea between the two stanzas was that the first poses a question, and the second answers it. Why can't she find love? Because she eats people. laugh

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Jan 7, 2009 by
LL Waz
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Oh, I do like this. Fantastic subject and neatly, concisely done.

The first two lines might be better alluding to fire-fly practices rather than stating them, but you'd have to weigh thae poetic gain against the risk of readers not getting the story.

Perhaps, since this is online, a dmitri-style link within the poem to background info would work.

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Jan 7, 2009 by
Cyzaki
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I would be tempted to say 'They' rather than 'Fireflies' at the beginning, and link to the information about Photuris fireflies as LLWaz suggested. I think it'd have more impact that way.

panda

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Apr 17, 2010 by
Still_WRD
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Here we are, nothing about fireflies, except for the flutter of wings. The link is in the first "I." Changed some line breaks and phrasing here and there as well. And improvement?

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Apr 17, 2010 by Online Now
Dmitri Gheorgheni
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laugh I think so.

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Subject: A45100027 - Photuris
Posted Apr 26, 2010 by
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I like this better now. smiley

Subtle and effective, and hinting at a wider meaning.

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