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Posted May 3, 2012 by  Beatrice Backing Belgium
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  | | I think that works well as a stand alone entry, nicely done!
Just a couple of points:
Stating that "A Night to Remember" was the best adaptation is a bit of a personal opinion, but maybe "arguably the best" would do.
Not sure about the nationality of passengers - at that time, Ireland wasn't an independent state, so all those Irish passengers were technically British. Would it be too clumsy to say "from Ireland"? Or would a bit of contextual history help? (Here in Belfast, commemorations of the 100th anniversary of the sinking were followed swiftly by commemomorations of the 100th anniversary of the signing of the Ulster Covenant)
Why was the ship registered at Liverpool?
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| | | Subject: A87756961 - RMS Titanic - Myths and Mysteries, Facts and Fiction
Posted May 3, 2012 by Gnomon does it all by himself
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| | Good entry, Bluebottle.
Some of your headings seem to be "true" and most "false". Would it be better to put "true" and "false" at the end of each heading?
I'm loathe to point out spelling mistakes, but some might get past even the most eagle-eyed sub-editors, so:
principle port --> principal port
I'm puzzled by the section about Bruce Ismay. Who was he? Just one of the passengers? One of the owners? Why would he have given the captain instructions?
The grammar of this sentence is all wrong, making it unclear what it is saying. Can you sort it out, possibly by splitting into two sentence?
"Of the 113 Irish Third Class passengers, 47 of whom survived, however only 18 of the 118 British passengers and 23 of the 104 Swedish passengers in Third Class survived."
"The Carpathia was 58 miles away" you tell us this twice in two sentences.
HMHS Britannia -- is that really HMHS ?
The film lasts 34 longer than the time -- 34 minutes?
  
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| | | Subject: A87756961 - RMS Titanic - Myths and Mysteries, Facts and Fiction
Posted May 3, 2012 by Bluebottle
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Thanks all - changes made.
 Stating that "A Night to Remember" was the best adaptation is a bit of a personal opinion, but maybe "arguably the best" would do.
 But it is the best! I've added 'widely regarded' so as not to upset the fans of 1912's In Nacht und Eis.
Not sure about the nationality of passengers - at that time... all those Irish passengers were technically British.
I've added a footnote to that effect - does this address it, or should more be done?
Why was the ship registered at Liverpool?
Just because between 1867-1907 Liverpool was White Star's home port, before it was realised that Southampton was a much better passenger port due to its proximity to London, closeness to France (where more passengers could be picked up) deeper water channel, larger dry docks and unique double high-tides caused by the proximity of the Isle of Wight which meant even the biggest ships could dock at Southampton at all states of the tide.
In the piece on Jospeh Bruce Ismay, it might be worth mentioning who he was.
More background on Ismay's included.
Just wondering whether these might contain useful information:
Thanks, Geggs - I've added them as reference links too.
"Good entry, Bluebottle." - Gnomon
High praise indeed!
Would it be better to put "true" and "false" at the end of each heading?
Good idea, done now.
principle port --> principal port
The grammar of this sentence is all wrong, making it unclear what it is saying. Can you sort it out, possibly by splitting into two sentence?
Hopefully better now.
"The Carpathia was 58 miles away" you tell us this twice in two sentences.
The fact it was 58 miles away is doubly important, honest  Deleted.
HMHS Britannia -- is that really HMHS ?
His Majesty's Hospital Ship - footnote added to explain.
The film lasts 34 longer than the time -- 34 minutes?
Although it feels like 34 lifetimes, it is indeed 34 minutes.
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